Hello fellow viewers. Today I have made a piece of writing called Scrambled. Here is the link to the video
I hope you like it!
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The girl is sprinting down the escalator hoping she is going to catch the train that is leaving the station right as we speak.
Suddenly she sees the train leaving the train station, she frowns and sits down on a seat, she pulls out her phone and starts playing a game on it.
A few meters away from her is a Rubix cube, but the Rubix cube isn’t a normal Rubix cube, suddenly the Rubix cube looks up at the ceiling, and then glares straight. The Rubix cube stares at the girl and walks over to her, the cube jumps onto the seat that the girl is sitting on and walks over to her and touches her. The girl looks down and turns around as if there was someone that could of thrown it at her, but there was no one around.
She picks up the cube and starts to solve it but then messes the cube up and throws it down onto the seat. The cube is sad and stares up at her, but climbs onto the top of the seat and taps her on her headphones. The girl looks around and glances at the cube, she gets a jump scare, the cube hops down onto her. The cube jumps onto the girl and sits down, the girl stares at the cube and turns off her phone, and picks up the cube. She looks at the cube and starts to solve it but she gets frustrated!
Suddenly she gazes up at the time and the train is coming any second, the cube turns too and then shows the girl how to solve it, the girl was confused at the start but then started figured it out. She closed her eyes and imagined it in her mind, suddenly, she opened her eyes and figured it out. She started to solve the cube and then the train stopped at the station and she solved it! But, the cube doesn’t move. She taps the cube but the cube doesn’t move. The girl is really sad but she is happy that she solved it. She puts the cube down onto the seat and walks onto the train, the train starts to move and then is gone.
Suddenly a man runs down onto the platform and chucks his bag onto the floor because he just missed the train. He sits down. The cube hops up and starts running towards the man, the cube starts mixing itself up and then comes to a stop. The end.
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Kia ora Antonio, you've retold the story really well! I like the way you have broken up the different ideas into paragraphs. This makes it much easier to read. Do you think you could tell this same story but from the girl's point of view? How would you describe how shocked she would be to discover a Rubix cube that can move and wants to communicate with her? What about telling the story from the Rubix cube's point of view? How different do you think the story would be? How do you think the Rubix cube would describe the annoyed girl? Remember how big she would be compared to the tiny cube.... blog you later, Megan : )
ReplyDeleteThanks for the positive support Ms Judd. Yes I could try do it from another prospective but it would be a challenge. I think that the girl would be terrified when she saw the Rubix Cube. I think that the Rubix Cube would describe the girl as scared and shocked. Have you written a story like this??
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